The water
reflected the walkway lights ineffectively. The fountain pool was black and
still like an oil puddle in a parking lot. The streams were turned off so the
metallic poles that normally transformed the campus into postcard level scenery
now stood stiff, unwavering it seemed.
We had driven up
in a friend’s Jeep. I had just met her and she said she had stopped drinking
hours ago. It was unclear as to how we had never met, it seemed as though we
both knew everyone there. Plus she wore caps that were too big for her head and
laughed loudly at boys wrestling each other with solo cups in hand.
The parking lot
we used was empty and I stood at the lip of the water for a moment. A single
streetlight shown on the empty campus road and the cement was cold beneath my
toes. We took off our clothes and jumped in. There were five of us. Me and Tim
and three girls I knew from documentaries and parties and serious talks with
acquaintances.
The water was
cold and my legs quickly went numb. I wrapped myself in a towel, which must
have required some premeditation by our driver. It was 3 am and I had just
graduated. I had nowhere to be.
The campus sat
dark and unwavering. The buildings were designed in the sixties and the jagged
stone did not seem dated enough. As if it were a collection of banking offices.
I stood and look
out at the campus as four people I didn’t know rubbed towels down their thighs.
I wondered if I’d ever see this place again.
JACK: Good first draft. Keep going with your exploration of this event. I think you're "hanging" a lot of interesting detail, but it doesn't foment into something more than detail? Study what you put into the draft? I think you're pinpointing a moment in a time of transition and that's worth thinking more about, because I think that can be reflected in relation to the details that you've already recruited? Make sense?
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