I stomped up the
stairs. The bar had been crowded and lively and dark. It was in the basement I
think and I was leaving. As I reached the streets the two bouncers nodded at me
as the third checked IDs. I’m not sure how I missed the machine that was scanning
and projecting people’s faces on tv screens.
Well fuck, there
were at least three cop cars. Four, four cop cars. The street was full of
people.
“I think she went
to the City Tavern,” I said. I pointed across the street to what seemed to be
another bar. There was a porch and a line of people. I stepped into the street.
“We need to find
Aidan,” my friend said. She was a girl and a friend from high school. Earlier, I
saw my fourth grade teacher in line and gave her a hug. She smiled at me and introduced
me to her boyfriend. He was very large man.
Earlier that
night I had a few beers and Erica picked me up. We stopped at a liquor store
and then we stopped at the convenience store that Aidan was managing. Aidan had
dropped out of college our freshman year. His convenience store basebal cap
covered his pale brown coif, which significantly altered his appearance. He
looked like anyone now. He was very pale and the fluorescents lights made him
an almost sickly green. He shifted about the multicolor racks and his eyes
darted about quickly. I thought he had been mad at me since I skipped out on
tennis with him. I didn’t think we’d get very far asking him for a ride.
“My phone’s
broken. What’s up?” He said as he rang up a woman’s Coke and gum. She had a tattoo
on the back of her shoulder of birds flying away. We asked him if he’d pick us
up from the bars after work.
“Sure but my
phone’s broken. I can’t reach you.”
“Well how about
we meet you at the bookstore at 1 am.” There was only one bookstore in this
fucking town.
“The bookstore is
a bad spot. I’ll find you.” Then he went back to stock the milk gallons in the
tall glass coolers.
I had given up
on the girl. She had left with her friends, a shimmer of dresses running up the
stairs. 1:32 am. People I had known in a past life, one of Friday night
football games and bonfires, gathered about. My brown desert boots were a bit
too big for my feet, the extra length to my toes caused my to stumble a bit on
the sidewalk.
I circled the
street. The night was closing. The bartenders leaned on the counters and some
counted singles. The men leaned their ears down to the dresses they were
talking to. I walked back out onto the street, away from the police and the
throng of post grads and grads and working people. I checked my phone out of
habit. The air was warm and the skin outside my t shirt hummed. My underwear
had ridden up throughout the night. I tugged at the back of my jeans and stuck
my phone in my pocket. I looked up. On the street corner was Aidan. In a
Detroit Tigers baseball cap. He was scanning the line for the tavern. The
orange street lights warmed him his skin and the neon sign from the bar glowed
green across his white t shirt. It was a pretty visible location he had chosen,
there weren’t many people on that end of the street. He was comfortable alone.
He stood straight almost leaning back on the heels of his boots. His shoulders
were not rounded like mine.
I punched him on
the arm and we walked past the bright headlights of the cop cars to find our
friends.
Jack:: This one is nearly fantastic. And it's all in the details. The bouncers, the baseball caps, the boots... and that final punch on the arm... very nice. It feels a little confusing at points. Like it took me a few reads to get that you were stomping up from a basement bar. I don't know why you say, "I think." I'm not sure why the sight of the cops aggravates... It takes me a while to figure out who Erica is.... A complex narrative like this with a lot of details needs to be easy to follow.... Final note... I think that final punch on the arm needs to reveal a bit more? Can you qualify it?
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